Janet P.

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I want to go EGYPT. It is prime location to see great heritage from the ancient world including pyramids and wonderful temples. And I want to go to the Arabian Desert. When I was child, I read a book the contents of which is related in the Arabia pen. The book included the history of Egypt, India, Iran, and Iraq and so on. I will ride on a camel. In Korea, I heard that the reason why camel has the pump is have water in the pump. So traveler passing the desert cut the pump and than they drink water. But I know that actually in the pump consist of fat.

when I use flight From south KOREA to Egypt, take 14 ours. There are many hotel in Egypt. So I look forward to spend my winter vacation there. I plan travel around Egypt for 30 days. I will spend 2000000 won for the trip. It is not so expensive later than my expectation.

Here is the corrections.

I want to go to Egypt. It is a prime location to see a great heritage from the ancient world including pyramids and wonderful temples. I want to go to Arabian Desert too. When I was a child, I read a book and some of the contents is related to Arabian pen. The book includes the history of Egypt, India, Iran and Iraq. I will ride on a camel. In Korea I heard that the reason why camel has the hump is because they have water inside the hump, so if travelers passed by the desert they cut it and drink the water on it. But I know that hump is just a fat.

          If I will have a flight from South Korea to Egypt, it takes fourteen (14) hours; there are many hotels in Egypt. I am looking forward to spend my winter vacation there. I plan to travel around the country for thirty (30) days. I will spend 2,000,000 won for the trip. I think it is not expensive rather than my expectation.

Thanks a lot!

Janet