to tessa

Hello my name is Heeyun Lee and I'm single in mid 20's.

Hello my name is Heeyun Lee. I am in my mid 20's.

I have a boy friend and we've been together for 5 years now.

I am single but I have a boyfriend and we've been together for 5 years now.

On the other hand, there are 6 members in my family, my parents, me, 2 sisters and younger brother. 

There are 6 members in my family: my parents, my 2 sisters, ,my younger brother, and me. 

Actually, It's not common to have 3 siblings in Korea so I feel very special with them.

Finally, I'm a student at Korea University and my major is Spanish. 

I'm a student at Korea University and my major is Spanish. 

Some day, I want to be a professor. and that's why I'm studying very hard now.

Someday, I want to be a professor; and that's why I'm studying very hard now.

First of all, when it comes to my personality I'm very outgoing person.

When it comes to my personality I'm a very outgoing person.

I really love talking with other people in my free time.

furthermore, I always try to be positive. I'm sure that the positive mind makes me stronger.

Furthermore, I always try to be positive. I'm sure that the positive mind makes me stronger.

Hello there Lydia! I checked your script and I made some revisions. Here it is: 

Hello my name is Heeyun Lee. I am in my mid 20's.

I am single but I have a boyfriend and we've been together for 5 years now.

There are 6 members in my family: my parents, my 2 sisters, ,my younger brother, and me. 

Actually, It's not common to have 3 siblings in Korea so I feel very special with them.

I'm a student at Korea University and my major is Spanish. 

Someday, I want to be a professor; and that's why I'm studying very hard now.

When it comes to my personality I'm a very outgoing person.

I really love talking with other people in my free time.

Furthermore, I always try to be positive. I'm sure that the positive mind makes me stronger.

Thanks a lot! :)