Dark, gloomy but somewhat urgent situation. That was the first impression I had gotten from the picture. Time seems to be early morning and a salesperson whose face cannot be seen due to the shade of umbrella has a step to the sidewalk. Even though I cannot watch his physical appearance, he certainly does not look happy at all. The darkness and rain can make a lot of contribution to the depressing atmosphere of this picture as well. At the first time, I thought the man was dropping his one of documents trying to pick it up. That is why I thought an urgent situation because he even does not have enough time to take his missing one. But after watching carefully he just ignores his surroundings. He looks straightforward. That is why I believe he is a monotonous and routine business man who does not have enough presence of mind to consider other things around him.
One of the curious things is that the more careful I watch this picture, the brighter the image it has. Sunlight between the two buildings looks some kind of hope, wish, or happiness on that day.
It’s a dark, gloomy but somewhat an urgent situation. That was the first impression I got from the picture. Time seems to be early in the morning. Darkness and rain contribute a lot to the depressing atmosphere of this picture as well.
In the middle of the picture is a salesperson, whose face cannot be seen due to the shade of the umbrella, is about to step the sidewalk. Even though I cannot see his facial expression, he certainly does not look happy at all. At first, I thought the man dropped one of his documents but was not trying to pick it up. That is why I thought it is an urgent situation because he even does not have enough time to pick up the missing one. But after watching carefully, he just seems to ignore his surroundings. He looks straightforward. I assume that he is a monotonous and routine business man who does not have enough presence of mind to consider other things around him.
One interesting thing is that the more careful I watch this picture, the brighter the image gets. The sunlight between the two buildings gives some kind of hope, wish, or happiness on that day.
1. 1. Physical appearance is ok but facial expression is more exact to describe the picture.
2. 2. I divided them into shorter paragraphs. Each paragraph focuses on a specific topic. In the first paragraph, I put together all sentences describing the overall atmosphere of the picture. However in the second paragraph, I integrated all sentences related to the man. In this way, you can achieve coherence and flow in your ideas.
3. 3. Since it’s an academic writing, please try to avoid fragments. (I mean the first sentence.)
4. 4. Please make sure that your sentences are not conflicting. (I thought the man was dropping his one of documents trying to pick it up. That is why I thought an urgent situation because he even does not have enough time to take his missing one.) see the highlighted phrases.
5. 5. Be careful with the order of the words. (his one of documents – one of his documents)