Hi Ailyn!
This is Julia.
I want to tell you my story for improve my Englisy skill.^^
In last Friday, I felt abdominal pain extremly.
So my family called 119 and I went to the E.R near by my house.
That pain was gone as soon as I got a painkiller shot.
Dr. guessed it seems like a stone of urethra but needed close examination.
After weekend, I went to the general hospital and I was diagnosed with urolithiasis.
It"s not a serious disease but must have been hard disease.
Dr. said that disease occured well after summer and 20~40 ages.
I think Philipine is very hot and humid so there are a lot of patients that kind of disease.
I hope you drink a lot of water and exercise.
Take care of yourself ! bye^^
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I want to tell you my story to improve my English writing skill.
Last Friday, I felt an extreme abdominal pain.
So my family called 119 and they brought me to the ER nearby my house.
The pain was gone as soon as I got a shot of painkiller.
The doctor suspected it to be a urethral stone but I still needed more laboratory examinations.
After the weekend, I went to the general hospital and I was diagnosed with urolithiasis.
The doctor said that this disease usually occurs after summer season to people 20-40 years old.
I think the Philippines is very hot and humid so there might be many patients having this kind of disease.
I hope you will drink a lot of water and exercise as well.
Take care of yourself! Bye!
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hi Ms. Julia!
I'm sorry for the late corrections. Thank you for your concern too. ^^
I hope your condition will get well soon. Please take care of your health too.
I'm glad to check your writing. You can construct your sentences well though I made some few corrections.
The thought was also well-organized and the order of ideas was made correctly.
If you have more writing compositions, please feel free to send it to me.
Have a nice weekend! :)