Dear Marci.
I read the news as soon as I arrived at my company.
It was so bad and sad.
There are 9 people died and 7 people injuried.
On the news, the hostage taker was so bad guy.
They mentioned why he did it and what happened in the bus.
But I think the explanation is not enough.
I just think his way to get his job is wrong.
But if the plice offiers handled it well, the tragedy wouldn't happen.
That's so sad news.
Forget it and Enjoy your day!
Bye~
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If you have enough time, could you correct the grammar or expression?
Thank you.
Dear Marci.
I read the news as soon as I arrived at my company.
It was so bad and sad.
There are 9 people died and 7 people injuried.>> There were 9 people dead and 7 people injured.
On the news, the hostage taker was so bad guy.>> On the news, the hostage taker was really a bad guy.
They mentioned why he did it and what happened in the bus.
But I think the explanation is not enough. >> But I think the explanation was not enough.
I just think his way to get his job is wrong.
But if the plice offiers handled it well, the tragedy wouldn't happen.>> But if the police officers handled it well, the tragedy wouldn't happen.
That's so sad news.
Forget it and Enjoy your day!
Bye~
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If you have enough time, could you correct the grammar or expression?
Thank you.
>> You're welcome! You're also aware about the tragic hostage taking. Thank you for your opinion. Actually, there are a lot of things that need to be explained to the public. By the way, today is our National Mourning Day so everyone has to wear black. Thank you again and have a nice day!