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Unit 1-1: Turn Back Time

If you could turn back time and experience again an event in your life, what would it be?

I want to back my 23 years old.( I want to go back when I was 23 years old) That time I worked at photo studio. I was a member of photo club at collage.( during college) I was very interested in pictures.  So I worked at studio to take a picture and I was away from school for the whole year.  Although I liked photo, it was very difficult for me to adopt the studio. But I learned a lot of thing(things) in the photo studio such like ( such as) communication skills and movie editing.

Now I am 25 years old. And I am looking for a job. Aboard experience is very necessary for job hunter in Korea.  I had been Japan 2007 (  I had been to Japan last 2007) for 6 months as an exchange student. I met a lot of country’s friends. They had different culture and idea. (They had different cultures and ideas.) This experience that I met many foreign friends made my idea more widely.

So if I could turn back time, I will trip around the world with backpack.( I will have a trip around the with my backpack)  Now I don’t have much money and much time. That time that I was 23 years old was very comfortable time for me. Especially I want to go Europe and India. I will proceed (precede) a project. Only looking around foreign country will made me boring now I have a lot of interest in the coffee. So I will research coffee cultures. And write the contents on my BLOG. My goal is those make power blog (power BLOG) about coffee, Japan, travel and photo.  And ultimately will make a book about travel.

I know I couldn’t turn back time but I will trip around world in this year. (I will have a trip in this year.) In October I will travel Europe.  I am looking for traveling foreign country and make new relationship with foreign friends. (I am looking for a foreign country to travel and make new relationship with foreigner  friends) 

Mariyon,

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Here is  the final paragraph:

I want to go back when I was 23 years old. At that Time I worked at the photo studio.  I was a member of photo club during college days. I am very interested in pictures, so I worked at the studio to take some picture and I was away from school for the whole year. Although I like photo, It was very difficult for me to adopt at the studio, but I've learn a lot of things in the photo studio such as communication skills and movie editing.

Now I am 25 years old and I'm looking for a job. Abroad experience is very necessary for the job hunter in Korea. I had been in Japan last 2007 and stay there for 6 months as an exchange student. I met a lot of country's friends. They have different cultures and ideas.

In this experience, I met many foreign friends that made my idea wider. So if I could turn back the time, I will go on trip around the world with my backpack but now I don't have much money and time.

That time when I was 23 years old it was very comfortable for me. Especially I want to go Europe and India to precede a project. Looking around in foreign country will make me boring, now a have a lot of interest in the coffee, so I will researches coffee cultures and write the contents on my BLOG. My goal is to make power BLOG about coffee, Japan, travel, photo, and ultimately I will make a book about travel. I know I couldn't turn back the time but I will have a trip around the world in this year. I will travel in Europe this October. I am looking for a foreign country to travel and make a new relationship with foreigner friends