Hi..Marge!!! I am thankful for you for correcting my senteces.
1. Competition is the same like both sides of the coin.
2. Many people are suffering from stress through competitions. We can get articles at the news easily
that students kill themselves because of the stress they coudln't overcome from studies during the
middle and high school.
3. Life is consecutiveness of competitions. First, we do compete with our friends to get high score for
entering high grade universitiy. After then, we compete with the same age to get into the better company for high salaries and stable positions. And we keep competing with coworkers for high status. We compete over and over with people until dying.
4. On the otherhand, Competition makes our society we are belongs to active and enthusiastic.
No one will make an effort in an organization if there is not proper compensation. Who will be
hard working if they get the same treatment all the time regardless of hard works. Therefore,
competition is a natural phenomenan.
Hope to see you tomorrow!!^&^
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2. Many people are suffering from stress through competitions. We can get articles at the news easily
that students kill themselves because of the stress they coudln't overcome from studies during the
middle and high school.
--CORRECT
3. Life is consecutive of competitions. First, we do compete with our friends to get high score for
entering high grade university. After then, we compete with the same age to get into the better company for high salaries and stable positions. And we keep competing with coworkers for high status. We compete over and over with people until dying.
--After that,we compete with the same age to get into the better company for higher salary and stable position.
4. On the other hand, Competition makes our society we are belongs to active and enthusiastic.
No one will make an effort in an organization if there is not proper compensation. Who will be
hard working if they get the same treatment all the time regardless of hard works. Therefore,
competition is a natural phenomenon.
--On the other hand,competition makes our society become more active and enthusiastic.
No one will make an effort in an organization if they don't give the proper compensation.Whose going to work hard if they treat anyone just the same even if they work hard.Therefore competition is a natural phenomenon.